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It's a while since I had anyone real,

To hold me and comfort me in the night,

To caress me, kiss me and give delight,

It's a while since I was able to feel,

So I let it go and I fell to sleep,

I sealed myself up as though in a keep.

I've woken up now and I can't help but think,

That wonders await or that I will sink.

There's still no one here to hold onto me,

I don't know how to look or search for more,

I'm determined not to again close that door,

Afraid and hopeful I guess we shall see,

If there's anyone out there who could care,

One I want who also wants to be there.

I've woken up now and I can't help but think,

That wonders await or that I will sink.

*gives a lollipop*

There are some powerful rhyming couplets in this poem. For me it is lines 1 and 4 in Stanza 1 and lines 2 and 3 in Stanza 3.

I'm kind of trying to develop a new poetic style, riffing off the bop with some additions from elsewhere. So whilst this is technically freeform, it follows a set of rules I'm working on. The 1 4 couplet is core to holding it together, so glad you spotted it. It should be the strongest couplet in each stanza so I still need to work on my word choice I see Smile

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